"Reducing Word Length to Achieve Conciseness," page 79 The directions are: Limit sentence length, limit word length. Find shorter words to replace the following words. #1: The word given is "Advise", I would replace it with "Teach". #5: The word given is "Determine", I would replace it with "Find". ----- "Avoiding Sexist Language," (page 120) #4, #10 The directions are: Revise the following sentences to avoid sexist language. #4: "The president of the corporation, a women, met with her sales staff." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "The president of the corporation, met with the sales staff." #10: "The policemen and firemen rushed to the scene of the accident." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "The police and firefighters rushed to the scene of the accident." ----- "Achieving Clarity," (page 78) #1, #2 The directions are: Revise these sentences-replace the vague, impressionistic words with more specific information. #1: "We need this information as soon as possible." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "We need the sales results for the last physical month, turned in this Monday by 2pm." #2: "The machinery will replace the flawed piece of equipment in our department." I would revise that sentence to say the following: "The new printer will replace the broken one in the sales department."
The directions are:
Limit sentence length, limit word length. Find shorter words to replace the following words.
#1: The word given is "Advise", I would replace it with "Teach".
#5: The word given is "Determine", I would replace it with "Find".
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"Avoiding Sexist Language," (page 120) #4, #10
The directions are:
Revise the following sentences to avoid sexist language.
#4: "The president of the corporation, a women, met with her sales staff."
I would revise that sentence to say the following:
"The president of the corporation, met with the sales staff."
#10: "The policemen and firemen rushed to the scene of the accident."
I would revise that sentence to say the following:
"The police and firefighters rushed to the scene of the accident."
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"Achieving Clarity," (page 78) #1, #2
The directions are:
Revise these sentences-replace the vague, impressionistic words with more specific information.
#1: "We need this information as soon as possible."
I would revise that sentence to say the following:
"We need the sales results for the last physical month, turned in this Monday by 2pm."
#2: "The machinery will replace the flawed piece of equipment in our department."
I would revise that sentence to say the following:
"The new printer will replace the broken one in the sales department."
- Completed by Nathan Mellendorf